MaryKate Freakout

I don't really mind things like essays or writing samples. I love to write so that might be why. My "freak out" was really unorganized but no big deal. I like questions like the one about identity, ones you can think about for a while and kind of be on both sides on. I really was positive i thought identity came from society but then halfway through i started questioning something else... I act somewhat like my family. Picking a side can be difficult.
I Did Well:

• Some topic sentences
• Lengthy 
• Point of view

I Didn't Do Well:

• Orginazation
• Some topic sentences
• Thesis
• Connection
• Too many sentences in into paragraph
• Too many paragraphs